User blog comment:LEONIDAS 666/You wanted more.(well atleast one of you did.)/@comment-4773880-20120521120831/@comment-31.205.2.88-20120521162504

It is contructive. He told you what is wrong with your story so you may fix it. He didn't degrade or make it sound bad, he just said that they way you are writing your character makes it seem like he is too perfect. I can understand you want to make him seem as unbeatable, unkillable and always victorious but that just makes the story predictable.

Have you read any of the Space Marine stories by the Black Library authors? An example is Uriel Ventris. He is the main character but he had his flaws. He dishonoured his company and found redemption. Another mistake you may make in the future is Deus Ex Machina, ie. your hero is in trouble then help suddenly and miraculously arrives without you explaining it.

You're just starting to write stories so you can't expect everything to be good from the get go. You wanted to know how to improve your story in your last chapter and a person gave you his critic. If you find this not to your liking either, don't blame the person who is giving constructive criticism and instead, learn to accept it and improve from there.