Thread:Shas'o'Kais/@comment-2045915-20121103114645

I would hold off on the Tau Weapons pages for now and continue your work on the vehicles. Your Manta page was probably the best you have done, and you have come a long way. But as we discussed, you are still having problems with clear phrasing and organisation of your information. You can see the edits I made to the Airbursting Fragmentation page to get a better sense of what I mean. While there was a lot of good information there, it was poorly organised and somewhat difficult to understand.

For instance, in the page's introductory paragraph you need to clearly state exactly what the weapon is and what it does; that was not clear. My advice is this: do less paraphrasing and more direct copying of the information you see to get a better feel for how to organise the information. I will edit it and prevent the problem of plagiarism from occurring. You need more practice in getting the information clearly onto the page; this is best done by copying the work of others who have already done it properly. As such, the vehicles pages you are doing are coming much closer to meeting our standards right now; perfect them first before you attempt to move on to an entirely different type of article. Thanks. 