Thread:Sereno Black/@comment-2045915-20120406053410/@comment-2045915-20120408060655

OK, here are some problems.

1. I asume you know the page is incomplete. Please complete the story of the Outcast Dead and their journey with Kai Zulane.

2. Spelling. The wiki has a built-in spelling error. While typos always are a problem, there is no excuse for true misspellings. Use the spelling editor in Source mode and look the word up on the Internet if you do not know how to spell it.

3. Do not copy the style of the source you are using for the page. Write in clear, simple prose that explains what happened without copying the more elaborate terms for simple concepts like 'The Great Ocean." That means nothing to a casual reader. Say the Warp when you mean the Warp.

4. Check what I edit and ask why if you don't know as this will improve your work.

Other than that a good first effort. Now complete the page and maybe you can do Zai Kulane's character page next. Thanks.