Board Thread:Warhammer 40k Roleplay/@comment-28917471-20150214113602/@comment-28917471-20150301004924

Actually, it is pretty good. There are however some grammar mistakes, but I understand that they came from an over-exhaustion writing. Don't write so much info in one post next time ok? (though I guess that this is all what you were writing for the past days 12, yes?).

And don't forget that when you write someone's name, it must be with a big letter.

Also, when you done writing a message, make sure that the grammar is right, ok? I won't count this one since it is your character's bio.

Overall, it is a good character profile. There is just one thing, the bionic eye that Sefarius has is actually a digital-weapon. Only those that have ties with the Inquisition can have that kind of weapon, and Sefarius is not part of it. So I will ask you to erase the digital weapon. You can keep the eye patch though.