User blog comment:Sindri Myr/It is the fifty-first millennium.../@comment-28917471-20130419065859

I don't know... you literaly threw everyone into meat grinder, except the Tyranids and the Necrons, The Forces of Chaos you saved for the last.

I don't feel that everyone were involved in this event. The God-Emperor, the strongest force of order inside the Warp wasn't even metioned, for he could do at list something to protect his loved species. Cegorach  wasn't as well  metioned, I geuss that he didn't even care for the Eldar, in your story of course. The Primarchs didn't return to lead their fellow space marines into the last battle.

I don't see here any kind of struggle for a survivel.(Except for the Orks and Chaos) If you were going to butcher everyone in the end,  then make an impression of that at list. The Forces of Order( meaning the Tau, Eldars and the Imperium) united to make a last stand against a great enemy, or something like that, and after that kill whoever you want to kill! As the Eye of Terror weakned, you could mention what happend to the Daemon Primarchs.

In my opinion, this is not how all life beings should end in the 40k universe. But I won't be an Asshole, and I understand that you did put a pretty much of your time and strengthin this story. You couldn't metion everything in this because the universe of 40k is too big.

Beside all that you did a great job. Don't think I could spare some of my strength for this, thats why im criticizing it. Nice work.